Bad news for idea conveyance

In thinking about a certain idea, many sentences and ideas can be drawn by using detailed words within this idea.

This sentence, although it’s intentions are good, has no kinetic motion—it doesn’t drive the reader any closer to understanding the whole point. It’s general because of it’s futile use of the word “many,” but that’s not it’s major failing: the second clause details a condition that “can” occur if the writer himself uses “detailed words.” Don’t narrate that good things can come from descriptive writing, show readers that they can.

And what is this “certain idea?” Chances are, if you’re writing this, you know what this idea is, and you shouldn’t cop out by not choosing one. Try this:

In thinking about the significance of reading to your children, there are a multitude of exciting benefits that come to mind.

There. Hapless generality (if that’s your thing) doesn’t do squat...!